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[maral55]

پاسخ : class room

Howdy everyone!
First of all I apologize for being late in attending the class room. I seem to be a bit ill recently as well as being lazy. By the way, Back to the main topic
Well, there are a lot that can be said about singers singing and this whole career of music. If I want to talk in general I strongly beleive that to be successful in being a singer first you've got to have a special inner talent. I mean this should run in your blood .Of course a decent music education these days is necessary for a supposedly good singer but I believe that inner talent is more important especially when we are speaking about acting which is inseperable of singing in modern days. In the career of music advertisement plays a huge part. and well I suppose for a good start you also need to have a good sum of money. And the other factor that also plays an important part is to hire an efficient manager. I have a lot{many}[I have many things to say,or, I have a lot to say] other things to say but so little time for me, I'll be back later​

One little mistake​

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

alryt,Time is over.
The topic is locked & The sentences will be checked.
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and thanks for your cooperation ​

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

The sentences are checked:
But,as you have posted different numbers of sentences,We should judge according to the meaning of a sentence,How it can be understanded,& also the number of mistakes. :)
So wait for the results:
maral 55 .1
Fire Storm.2
Nadia & Mahdad .3
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Congratulations! ​

 

[jamjam]

پاسخ : class room

Hello evrybody. i think i was late. now, what's the new subject?

 

[maral55]

پاسخ : class room

So , what's the next topic?​

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

So , what's the next topic?​

We'll tell you ... :)​

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

The next topic is "How we use computer & how we should use it."Last time,I checked the mistakes of your sentences,But this time,after you made your sentences ,I want you find the mistakes in all the sentences.
The person who finds more & owns less mistakes,will be the winner.
Now,Write your sentences...
Each person can only write her/his sentence/sentences in ONE post.
2 days later,We're gonna stop writing sentences & start checking them!
Thnx for ur cooperation.
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mina:tnx Dear Narges ​

Narges:urWelcome dear ​

 

[hermes]

پاسخ : class room

Hi lets C wt do we have[What we have] here..........."How we use computer & how we should use it."​

It is a fact that I use computer in summer without having any limitations.........I do not know[whether] it is wrong or not but I am sure that in other seasons I [will]have to use it less​

َAlso [the](We should add THE before the word internet)internet addiction is at the top of addictions [the] internet addiction is a branch of computer addiction........this kind of addiction will contain lots of pain and injuries some of them may appear after some years​

So we should use computer with some limitation.......also having a simple schedule will help us in order to[It's better not to use TO after the verb HELP] avoid complicated problems​

five mistakes+ one repeated mistake​

 

[mahdad]

پاسخ : class room

hello,i wanna write mt idea ,my Esteem[?what's the usage of this word here?] is: if we use[using better,but it's correct,too]] computer morethan 120mintues per day(with CRT monitors and 155mintues with LCD monitores)is bad cause:Symptom is:daugter of the Bill gates(the richest man in the world)is admitance[allowed] for [to]use xbox and computer just 130-160 mintues per[you should omit the word PER] everyday (it's whenas the Swing of electricity for USA monitors is less than iran's electricity noise)
but the Median use of middle east people is 295/3mintues per everyday​

[each day is correct too]
that's all :-[ :)

four mistakes+ one repeated mistake​

 

[fire storm]

پاسخ : class room

I agree with you
Using the[It's better to omit THE,but that's correct,too] computer can be very dangerous for our body
But as you said if we use it correctly it can be very useful​

No mistake

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[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

Dear members,
Please make your sentences sooner...
The time ,for making sentences, is extended! :)
Thanks​

 

[maral55]

پاسخ : class room

Well, To explain the matter better I think it's more effective to divide it in to two category[categories], How we use computer in our country and how we should use it and also how the people of other countries use computer and what they should do to get a better result. I want to begin with the first part; how we use computer in our country.

Then I think we can place the people of our country in to[into]( there's no space between in & to) three or four different categories. First are the people mostly the elders who usually have no idea about computer or how to use it or even how to turn it on. For these people I think it's strongly recommended that they try to make themselves educated in this area and take the necessary classes in this field.
As about the second category are [is] those who are addicted to computer, they spend hours and hours of their valuable time just surfing[the] internet be it [what's the usage of this par?]for a good or bad purpose. I believe that this is not healthy and these people should seek help immediately and try to get back in to their normal pattern of lives and live healthily since we all know the numerous harmful effects that this addiction can bring about for us.
The next category are [is]those who use computer solely and merely for the purpose of fun. spending time chatting in chat rooms or useless discussions in some forums. This also isn't an appropriate way for using the modern technology not to mention the other potential risks for teenagers such as getting acquainted with some villains. The last group are those who can keep a healthy balance between having fun and using computer and [the]internet for good purposes such as paying the bills or shopping via[the] internet downloading scientific books or be in touch and exchange information with their friends get the latest news or to make it short to increase their knowledge. I think this is the best way to use a computer.

Well, since I don't have anymore time left I'm afraid that the next category which are [is] the people of other countries should wait for another time. Thank you moderators for the brilliant topic​

Oh,thanks a lot!It was really useful & complete.
five mistakes + 2 repeated mistakes.​

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

Alryt!
Time is over!
Now each person must look for the mistakes of all the sentences!
& write them down,in one post!
4 members have written their own sentences.. So there will be 4 correcting posts!
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Go on...
Good luck.​

 

[maral55]

پاسخ : class room

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َAlso internet addiction is at the top of addictions internet addiction is a branch of computer addiction........this kind of addiction will contain lots of pain and injuries some of them may appear after some years​

So we should use computer with some limitation.......also having a simple schedule will help us in order to avoid complicated problems​

I don't know if it's right or wrong but maybe it's better to say : it will cause lots of pain and.... or it will lead to lots of pain and....​

hello,i wanna write mt idea ,my Esteem is: if we use computer morethan 120mintues per day(with CRT monitors and 155mintues with LCD monitores)is bad cause:Symptom is:daugter of the Bill gates(the richest man in the world)is[ for use xbox and computer just 130-160 mintues per everyday (it's whenas the Swing of electricity for USA monitors is less than iran's electricity noise)
but the Median use of middle east people is 295/3mintues per everyday​

that's all :-[ :)

what does Esteem mean here?
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and I think we can't say if we use computer .......is bad , it's better to say using computer .......is bad cause.....​

 

[hermes]

پاسخ : class room

I don't know if it's right or wrong but maybe it's better to say : it will cause lots of pain and.... or it will lead to lots of pain and....​

that is an other story..........i did nt like that.......but tnx :)​

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

Fire Storm,Mahdad & assasin!
PLZ check the Sentences,& write the mistakes down!
:)​

 

[fire storm]

پاسخ : class room

Hi lets C wt we have here ..........."How we use computer & how we should use it."​

It is a fact that I use computer in summer without having any limitations.........I do not know whether it is wrong or not but I am sure that in other seasons I have to use it less​

َAlso internet addiction is at the top of addictions internet addiction is a branch of computer addiction........this kind of addiction will contain lots of pain and injuries some of them may appear after some years​

So we should use computer with some limitation.......also having a simple schedule will help us in order to avoid complicated problems​

hello,i wanna write mt idea ,my Esteem is: if we use computer morethan 120mintues per day(with CRT monitors and 155mintues with LCD monitores)it can couse bad things : the Symptom is:daugter of the Bill gates(the richest man in the world)can use xbox and computer just 130-160 mintues per everyday (it's whenas the Swing of electricity for USA monitors is less than iran's electricity noise)
but the Median use of middle east people is 295/3mintues per everyday​

that's all :-[ :)

 

[maral55]

پاسخ : class room

So, what are the results?​

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

Namaki:five mistakes+ one repeated mistake
Mahdad:four mistakes+ one repeated mistake
Fire Storm:No mistake
Maral:
Oh,thanks a lot!It was really useful & complete.
five mistakes + 2 repeated mistakes

Thanks a lot for your cooperation.
the length of your sentences were different & also you have found different mistakes.
So I'll check & tell you who the winners are!

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[nima_nv]

پاسخ : class room

wanna tardy student?
can i join U ?