Classroom

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

I checked ur paragraphs.Thanks a lot for what u wrote.
I hope to see more paragraphs next time. ​

 

[parnian.d]

پاسخ : class room

Chose a topic Narges.
we'll write more

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

OK!
Next topic is "Time Management."Please write ur paragraphs here.
3,2,1,Go on!
Write!
:)​

 

[newthink]

پاسخ : class room

Time management is one of the most difficult things in Iranian`s life!...Generally management is a bit difficult for them...but we feel this problem more serious in time area because It`s sth that we face it("It"should be omitted,'cuz u have used it once & repeating the pronoun is not correct in this sentence.) every day(Everyday has no space between the words "every" & "day") & we are in touch with it more than anything else...There are several ways that show u how u can manage your time .for example each day write things that u wanna do in (ON) a piece of paper and then consider a specific time for each of them and try to accomplish them in that period of time..this way u can do all things u wanna do and you`ll figure out that 24 hours is even more than enough for u to do your work plus entertainment plus worshiping and so on.(This sentence is actually exact translation from Persian into English!But it's not correct in English language!you shouldn't use the word "PLUS" in this case.It doesn't mean what u wanna say.you'd better say "You can do your work in addition to entertainment,worshiping & so on.)​

Narges:
Thanks a lot for your nice paragraph. :)​

 

[parnian.d]

پاسخ : class room

well, that seems a real topic, but to be honest, I don't like to talk about time
TIME doesn't exist
I don't really care about it
live ur present moment!

p.s: i know we have to do a lot with time to be successful and ... but I study whenever i want and it'd helped me like what i'm(use was because of the past perfect that u used at the first of the sentence) doing​

Narges:Thanks a lot,but it doesn't have any special conclusion,& there's not a proper topic sentence in your paragraph :). ​

 

[Neg!n]

پاسخ : class room

i realy think time is gold!ya know why?because time makes everything and time destroys every thing(everything has no space between the words "every" & "thing".).....that's how i do realy think ???

Narges:Thanks but this not a paragraph,it's just the combination of four sentences without the shape & rules of a paragraph.
Thanks anyway for writing your idea. :)​

 

[xxfairladyxx]

پاسخ : class room

ok im just so confused right now​

 

[Narcissus]

پاسخ : class room

ok im just so confused right now​

Why are you confused? ???​

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I checked your paragraphs,they were good,but be careful about the rules of a paragraph.
Thanks,if you wanna add more paragraphs do it,& I'll check later.
Thanks for you cooperation. ​

 

[جیران]

پاسخ : Classroom

OK!
Next topic is "What is good friendship??"Please write ur paragraphs here.
Go on!

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[milad R]

پاسخ : Classroom

well,friendship is good if your friend help you in hard desicions(in maky hard decisions or make decision) & never leave you
for instant(instance) if one day a problem happens for me , he/she(will) help me to solve the problem





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